New Promo Demo ... Would love some feedback!

Promo Demo_Tim Rice.mp3

My last entry was a failed attempt at sarcastic satire that went over like "a led balloon" they say. If anyone reads these things ...I beg of you, I am in dire need of some feedback regarding my new promo demo.

My non-industry friends seem to like it ...but what really matters is the opinions of those who know the bitness ...your opinions! So please VO Universe, let me have it!

Constructive criticism humbly requested!

Thanks in advance for your cooperation means so much to me!

...oh, and YES "Scrubs" has, in fact moved from NBC to ABC for it's final season... it will be a mid-season replacement (see the bottom of this page) I was unaware that it would be starting in January when I read this script

Tim Rice

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Comment by Tim Rice on September 22, 2008 at 5:08pm
Thanks Joey! I plan on takin' all of these critiques to heart and completely revamp this demo.

...oh, and though I gave the wrong start date for the show ...Scrubs will be a mid-season replacement on ABC (See The Winter & Midseason Plans at the bottom of this page)
Comment by Joey Pepin on September 22, 2008 at 5:00pm
So Tim,
you're definitely talented, but you need to find YOUR voice. I think you are trying to sound like someone else on most of these promos. Being the VO Chamelion it might be tough to find your voice but you need to, especially if you want to do promo work. They're looking for a signature voice and you gots to have one that is unique to you.
AND yes, scrubs is an NBC show.
Comment by Tim Rice on September 20, 2008 at 10:25am
Sorry ...Ilene, my speed reading tendencies sometimes leave my comprehension lacking.
Comment by ilene russell on September 20, 2008 at 10:08am
BTW - it's ilene - I know it's the way i spell my name that's confusing. :)

Comment by ilene russell on September 20, 2008 at 10:02am
Did i accidentally delete something?

All great advice!!!!!!! Insightful and constructive comments from all.

My coach used to point out MD dialect faux pas every once in a while. Who knew? I don't have much of a regional dialect...but some words I've had to correct.

I'm taking my own advice...keep studying!! Great coaches here on site, too!!!
Comment by Tim Rice on September 20, 2008 at 10:01am
Phillip, Irene, David & Rick (...and any future commenter's on this blog)

You are giving me exactly what I asked for (and need). This is, in fact my first attempt at a promo demo. Relying only on self-direction, my purpose for posting this demo is to take your comments and use your input to tweek, change, and tweek some more in an attempt to make my demo as good as possible.

I am taking note of all of your comments (and future comments), soaking them up and will be revamping this demo as per your direction. Once this blog has played out, I plan to re-work this demo (and re-post it for more input). I plan on spending the next several weeks listening and studying the pros and their promo demos on the VOUniverse.

So please keep the comments coming! The more direction I can get the better.
I am hanging on your every word ...and I do so appreciate your input.

This is blog is turning into a shining example of just what a valuable resource the VOUniverse can be. Where else can relative newbies with limited budgets collect information, learn from and correspond with the greatest industry professionals in the Voiceover community?
Comment by VU - Founder - Zurek on September 20, 2008 at 8:15am

Here's another piece of advice, watch out for "regionalisms." I hear the southern dialect in your reads, and in this business it could be an escalator in reverse. I suggest you take a few dialect classes to achieve a more "neutral" sound. Being African American I know all about that, though I get work, I always go back and over critique myself. Sometimes I say "Fur" when I knew I should have said, "For," and sometimes "Heeah" come out when I should've said "Here." Occasinally I have clients that want "Heeah"...go figure!?!? That's my east coast side:) Having lived in Chicago, New York, Atlanta, Dallas and Miami... it gets a bit tricky. My normal dialect is NOT the same as my "working" dialect. You're very expressive, so telling a story won't be rocket science for you... that's good :) Everyone gave great advice, and Philip knocked it OUT of the park! Take the advice, put it in a bag, shake it up, study s'more and come out swinging.
Comment by DAVID ALDEN on September 20, 2008 at 3:18am
Alright Tim, Let's Talk Promos...

Well, first off, I want to acknowledge you for taking a step forward and asking for assistance from our vo community. This a very courageous step and you should pat yourself on the back for wanting to get better at something you obviously love to do. Keep in mind that ANY feedback that you recieve from anyone is just information. Information, that's it... it's not a reflection on your work or you as creative human being. How you evaluate this information and process it through your particular lense of life will determine what you do next on your promo demo and in your career. That being said, here's my evaluation. I think you have a really nice sound, but it tended to bounce around in styles a bit too much for my taste. Find YOUR "promo voice" and establish that sound right from the beginning. I kept wanting to hear more of YOU. Unless this is for your own personal website you may want to cut it down to about 1:15 or 1:30 at the most. You don't really need to play out the whole spot. A minor thing for me, but isn't "Scrubs" on NBC? Lastly, if promos are really something you want to pursue... then study them inside and out. Again, study them inside and out...
Well, there you go. I wish you all the best.


Comment by Tim Rice on September 19, 2008 at 8:04pm
Thanks so much for the kind words! Phillip had me re-examining my choice of professions and now you have given me back my hope. Appreciate it!
Comment by ilene russell on September 19, 2008 at 6:00pm
Hey Tim,

As I listened, I envisioned your demo promos as actual spots I'd heard on various broadcast media ...and it worked for me...definitely. I noted connection.

Having said that, as we are our own worst critic, when you get a gig where the spot turns out awesome, couldn't you add it, then knock out your least favorite?

Talent, timing, and luck are everything. You have all three. Persist. Just my .02

Best to ya.


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