Hi Steven. All so nice and clear, varied voicing and - what a relief - the background music & FX are at a sensible level so we have a sense that you are 'there'. Demos, and finished works, often get swamped by music which of course becomes even more enmeshed when broadcast. I think some punctuation/change of pace in your music would help separate the items. Did you notice the ending is lower level? It sort of peters out! Some performers end-slate.